Reviewer: ineffabird Anonymous Date: 01/19/08 - 11:45PM Title: 1/1

Oh, my God. This was- beautiful, if such a word can be allowed for the cicumstances under which it was applied. I applaud your language, the telling of the story backwards, te tempo, i can't even describe it really without going into the language of songs or poetry. I can feel from this every emotion you were trying to convey. That's surely what you were going for, wasn't it? Beautiful. Forgive me my incoherant rantings.

The only thing i could possibly even mention, just as a little thing, honest criticism you know- the very last part, #5. It didn't really seem to fit the rest of the piece. It's...oddly jaunty, as though Hakkai's moved out of being broken into a brittle little sanity that'll last him long enough to finish things. That wouldn't necessarily be inaccurate, but i fund it odd and slightly out of character for Sanzo to have given Hakka the means to his end. I can't see Sanzo letting him give up. But it raps everything up very nicely, which is after all the purpose of an end, and add a nice little touch of horror once one has read the entire story and can see what he's talking about.