Reviews For Dawn
Reviewer: 00011010101011101100 Anonymous Date: 05/08/07 - 10:00PM Title: Dawn
Reviewer: Sorchafyre Signed Date: 09/30/05 - 10:35PM Title: Dawn
::takes breath:: This is only the second piece I've *ever* read that makes me believe this particular scenario could happen.
You've got all their characters just so... spot-on *perfect* that, not even did I not have one instance of thnking "that's not what X sounds like", but on the contrary had the thought several times that "oh, yes, that's *exactly* what he would be like.
When I began the first paragraph, I was a little dismayed by the length of the description, and yet I read it and it was very well done. By no more than a quarter way in I realized that it was the perfect introduction to the tone of the story.
It's a very effective technique to come back to what Sanzo "doesn't" notice, thereby calling attention to his psyche in a subtle way. The overall quality of the writing is truly outstanding, on a level of quality equal to anything professionally produced.
Normally I quote some of my favorite lines, but I'd end up copy/pasteing most of the story, so I'll just note two that deserve special mention; jewels that shine more brightly out of the treasure trove than the others.
"Just once. Just this once because there's nothing else to do, because there's neither harm nor good in this and no monkey to use as an excuse. Because Hakkai's voice is so steady, and Gojyo's silence so unexpected. " That just perfectly *nails* his character and as I mentioned makes the whole thing work as a believable story.
"...then Hakkai's pale lips are sliding down around him and the branches above are dense with needles, sharp with sunlight." ::sighs in awe:: You know that few moments of silence at the end of a live show, when it's over and before the applause starts? The most sincere and unaffected form of appreciation I know of? Insert that here.
And, as an extra, added bonus, this story was *amazingly* hot. Erotica at its finest.
Thank you for sharing. I'll be looking for your other works.
Reviewer: zan Anonymous Date: 09/30/05 - 07:46PM Title: Dawn
*smiles idiotically* - nice!